ext_7363 ([identity profile] brunettepet.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] allyndra 2007-12-04 02:56 pm (UTC)

This is an excellent premise, and it's very entertaining. You've made Forrest and Riley being supportive and understanding ring true. They're all such good friends, it's fun to read. Forrest struggling with both guys suddenly liking men was funny and in voice and it tempered the tension created by Riley's internal bombshell.

You painted a vivid picture with your attention to detail in the club and watching Xander through Riley's eyes was very sexy. I'm looking forward to Riley and Xander meeting up.

Came over when you posted this at Nekid Spike. Your straightforward format is easier on my eyes!

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