ext_7363 ([identity profile] brunettepet.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] allyndra 2007-12-04 04:20 pm (UTC)

This was a vivid, entertaining chapter. Your Xander voice is excellent, and Riley's attraction is understandable. I love Riley being all awkward covert ops about gleaning information about Xander. Being driven to jack off by the idea of Xander in a Speedo was erotic and charming.

Riley being disgusted by his attraction to Parker was a nice detail. Parker and Xander are physically similar, so it makes sense.

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