ext_8833 ([identity profile] menomegirl.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] allyndra 2007-03-24 02:46 pm (UTC)

*flails* Oh my God! you can't leave it like that!

*grins* This was good. Better than good-it was perfect. You got everyone's voices down so well, I could hear the actor's voices while I read your dialogue. I could see it happening, just like that. Nothing felt contrived or off and you working it in with canon in such a way, that I found myself wishing it had happened like that on the show.

LOL! Even that last paragraph was perfect. Of course the first kiss in reality would be awkward and clumsy and not dream-perfect.

Very well done. I enjoyed reading this immensely.

Thank you for sharing!

xxx

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