This is marvelous! I just adore how blunt and clueless Ron is, but how at the same time he tries to think things through and make good choices.
Neville is charmingly besotted with Ron -- love how it takes Ron ages to realize it isn't the plants that Neville has that dreamy look for.
You create such a wonderful mood with this, from the encounter in Herbology with the shy (and narratively appropriate!) Silver Tangles, to the memory of Molly scolding the twins with good advice about crushes at the same time that she's thwapping them on the head.
Ron's reasons for liking the Cannons made complete sense to me, and his position of rooting fiercely for the underdog translates well into his dawning desire that he would like to make Neville happy.
Fantastic!
I can give you suggestions about where to post if you like. Also, one *teensy* thing -- the juice they spill at the table in the first scene should probably be pumpkin rather than orange.
Again, this is so lovely, and I'm thrilled that you wrote it for me!
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Date: 2008-03-16 01:00 pm (UTC)Neville is charmingly besotted with Ron -- love how it takes Ron ages to realize it isn't the plants that Neville has that dreamy look for.
You create such a wonderful mood with this, from the encounter in Herbology with the shy (and narratively appropriate!) Silver Tangles, to the memory of Molly scolding the twins with good advice about crushes at the same time that she's thwapping them on the head.
Ron's reasons for liking the Cannons made complete sense to me, and his position of rooting fiercely for the underdog translates well into his dawning desire that he would like to make Neville happy.
Fantastic!
I can give you suggestions about where to post if you like. Also, one *teensy* thing -- the juice they spill at the table in the first scene should probably be pumpkin rather than orange.
Again, this is so lovely, and I'm thrilled that you wrote it for me!